So I’m working on my blog for giveagirlapen that I have to post tomorrow, plus reviewing some things for people, and trying to write Avalon, so I’ve not the time to blog today.
Instead, I’ll leave you with a super short excerpt from a day in the life of Alexis Hodge =)
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Alexis slammed the back door of her ‘parents’’ house, and made a beeline for her car. At least Roxie would make her feel somewhat normal. Her 1967 VW Beetle was in pristine condition, and Alexis could not imagine any other car suiting her so well.
She grabbed the door handle, and quickly drew her hand back.
“Damn it!” That frackin’ hurt! What the hell?
Once again, she attempted to open the car door. Her hand was met with the same response—searing pain.
Can something please be normal in my life for one freaking second today? Just one thing?!
Dropping down to her knees, holding her useless right hand at her waist, Alexis shuffled around in her purse for her phone. Her left hand was fairly incapable of doing anything helpful, but she was able to scroll to Hollie’s number and hit send.
“Hello?”
“Hey, Hols. Can you come help me?” Alexis started to sniffle, and tears once again welled up. She let them fall. And fall.
“What’s going on, sweets? Why are you crying? Where are you?” Hollie sounded frantic.
“I don’t know. I don’t know. I just need to leave and I can’t. My parents aren’t my parents and my car just burned me….” She was sobbing so hard at this point that her words were all jumbled together and made no sense.
“Alexis—calm down. I don’t know what’s going on, but I’ll get over to you. You at home?”
“Yeah,” Alexis managed to blubber out.
Hollie reassured Alexis she’d be right there, and Alexis just let the phone drop back into her purse. She curled up into a ball, her forehead on her knees, tears spilling freely.
When it seemed she no longer had anything left to cry, Alexis felt a reassuring hand on her back. She slowly sat up, wiped her nose with her palm like a little kid, and looked to see who was there.
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Most likely, I’ll take a look at this tonight or tomorrow morning and revise a bit. Then I’ll post a revision.
If anyone feels like critiquing, go for it!!
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ego boost! August 20, 2009
Tags: comments, critiques, eden tyler, reviews, the abandoned edge of avalon
Some of my recent comments have been so wonderful I felt the need to share them::
* I don’t “do” fantasy, I do “do” The Abandoned Edge of Avalon! Pure skill.
* At last a ‘Faery story’ with bite! All too often these kind of tales are written in a similar vein, or should that be vain? Maybe it should as most of the authors are simply laying down flowery words instead of remembering the plot. Eden, you do not fall into that category.
–and my personal fave::
* My Gods Eden!
This is writing as tight as a crab’s arse at sixteen fathoms!
No nit-picks.
The story is horrible, suspenseful, gripping.
And a fairy story too.
Am I getting old? Is my senility making me exit into my second childhood?
This book may do that to me!
Quality writing and excellent crafting.
Happy day for me =) It’s an amazing feeling to know that others have these great things to say about my writing, let alone that they take the time to read my work in the first place!!