the whole shebang…

After being flogged and taking some time to revise on my own, I have totally different ‘first five sentences’ for my prologue and first chapter.

As an agent (just pretend—and if you are, well then pay attention ), would you find these first few lines intriguing enough to continue reading? Is there any interest there?? [a poll will be at the end of this post. if you'd participate, that'd be swell!!]

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FIRST FIVE OF PROLOGUE::

Ankou enjoyed delaying pleasure—stretching the game out until he couldn’t stand it any longer. Killing a faery was a rare occasion, occurring literally once in a blue moon. He had been released for a single waxing and waning cycle, just like twenty years ago, and twenty years before that. Each generation Ankou was granted such an opportunity, he made damned sure to savor every moment.
The blonde lovely had given birth as the sun rose one morning early during his freedom. Her agony was a tantalizing appetizer. Next to consuming an entire soul, fear and pain came second.

– (Ok, so that was 7 lines… It’s my favourite number =)) –

FIRST FIVE OF CHAPTER ONE::

The current was keeping her under for far too long, but Alexis wasn’t about to give up. She thrashed her arms and kicked her legs as hard as she could until a small beacon appeared ahead of her. Either she was close to opening her eyes for real, or she was succumbing to the strength of the water.
The seaweed that had been caught about her legs was now a help rather than a hindrance.

*Now for the poll — if you’d be so kind =)