So, this is the blurb (and logline) for Avalon.
At the moment, I’m fine with the logline.
I’m just curious as to what readers think of the blurb. Is it something that draws you in? Does it tell enough? Too much?
I’m up for any and all suggestions. I still have quite a ways to go until the book is finished, but I already know what’s going to happen. It’s just a matter of finding the time to write it all down…
I suppose I want to know that it’s not all for nothing 
Let me know your thoughts!! Thanks, ya’ll!!!
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*Visions of another dimension usher a girl through an adventure of immorality, virtue, and self-discovery.
*Intense visionary dreams transport twenty-year-old Alexis to the unseen world of faeries. She soon discovers this is the world she was born into, and it’s where she truly belongs—it is Avalon.
Two understanding friends guide her home after a nightmare reveals that one of her kind is attacking mortals. History has never seen such evil, and Alexis is the only faery who can stop it.
The unexpected help of a Depraved faery makes this quest much easier. But, when Alexis becomes attached to him and begins to see the world differently, will she have the strength to choose the right path? Or, will she succumb to her innermost demons at the expense of innocence?
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I think the content is fine. It does sound interesting (i mean, i’d like to read this book, judging from the general description). But I think the basic structuring needs to be re-done and made more concise.
thank you!!
good to know it’s something you might read. yay!
and, i’ll definitely take a look as to what i can give the heave-ho…tighten things up a bit.
thanks so much =)
-e*
I would leave out the first line. The rest tells the story. Good pitch.
interesting. thanks!!
–wait, by ‘first line,’ do you mean the logline? the sentence that’s separated by a space? if so, it’s not part of the blurb..
but, i’ll still take a look =)
-e*
The sentence that starts with visions.
yeah, that’s the logline =)
it’s like the short blurb that would be used for a review in a newspaper or the like. so it would be used separately from the longer blurb below.
so, i guess that means you think it’s all ok
thank you!!!